WWW: The front page is a reasonable start and the topic and text has potential. it is clear you have done research.
EBI: Written English is a major problem. This is not so much spelling/grammer than formal, academic writing style + organisation. You are not using topic sentences.
You don't introduce any of your quotes. At one point, you have 3 quotes in a row with no context, discussion or analysis.
You have almost a page of copied and pasted stuff on of James Bulger case: Why? I can't believe you proofread this essay and didn't see a major problem here.
Lack of media theory and impact on audience. Need many more academic quotes + analysis of these quotes to reach higher grades.
Referencing and bibliography is wrong: i can't check the research so can't award marks for it.
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